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Shipyards throughout the Federation refit these aged vessels, and by the dawning of 2365 the pilot launched Baker class heavy observer, USS Baker NCC 6666, saw the return of this venerable scientific class to service along all known borders. As well as supplementing frontier exploration efforts throughout the Federation.

This last sentence is still a sentence fragment with a misplaced modifier. Read it out loud on its own, and you’ll see what I mean. You might want to split up the previous sentence in to two sentences, and then incorporate the fragment into the new second sentence. However, that’s just one suggestion of how to fix the issue.

== I’m not sure how to correct this :( my English lessons fails me! Cries help?

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WARP PROPULSION SYSTEMS
The Baker class heavy observer utilizes a horizontally mounted Class 6 warp core. The core produces 1,516 Cochranes, the ship has a cruising speed of warp 6, a maximum sustainable speed of warp 8, a maximum speed for 12 hours of warp 9, and an emergency speed for 4 hours of warp 9.4.

The second sentence is a comma splice. You should make that two separate sentences, i.e. have the Cochrane output as one sentence and the various warp speeds as another sentence.

== Ok

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Phaser Systems
The Baker uses six Type-7 paired phaser banks. They are positioned as follows:
* One pair of banks ventral and dorsal on the forward sections of the primary hull with two emitters each.
* One pair of banks ventral and dorsal arranged to port and starboard on the primary hull with two emitters each.

This reads like you actually have four phaser banks in this line item. Either it’s ventral or dorsal, if you mean to limit the design to six phaser banks. I would recommend ventral, all things being equal, given the nature of the ship. Either that, or you could, akin to, say, the Excelsior class (albeit with a reduced number of emitters), have two ventral banks and two dorsal banks at a 30 degree angle from centerline, port and aft. You could also simply say, as you originally intended, that you have eight phaser banks.

• One pair of banks ventral and dorsal positioned on the central aft area of the secondary hull with two emitters each.

Each bank has a maximum energy output of 1.3 megawatts out to 75,000 kilometers.

== I’ll put it to eight as in reflection I think its supposed to be that in my original plans

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COMMAND AND SUPPORT SYSTEMS
Bridge
The Baker class bridge is located on Deck 1. It is arranged in a circular shape. The bridge is equipped with easy modular setup for refits, repairs and replacement as needed. The aft end of the bridge contains 4 auxiliary consoles for miscellaneous personnel needs. Centered along a railing from port to starboard are the combined tactical/security console, two science consoles and a communications console. Just forward from this straight railing in a triangle pattern are the ship’s commanding officer chair. Forward of the commanding officer’s chair is the helm station. Forward of the helm station is the ship’s main view screen, to port and starboard of the view screen are two turbolifts. Emergency access to the bridge is gained by a single Jeffries tube located centrally on the floor, in front of the helm station.

A few questions arise from this description that I missed before.

• Where, exactly, is the railing in relation to the aft of the Bridge? I have a basic idea, but it would be preferable to have something more explicitly stated.

== Aft of the CO’s chair, I added that in for the next draft

• Do you mean to have one chair or three in the “triangle pattern”? It seems like you mean for there to be only one chair, which means you should say “triangle-shaped dais”, but you also have “are” in the sentence, implying multiple chairs.

== You are correct, I fixed that!

• Given when the Baker was manufactured, and also just standard Starfleet Bridge designs, a single helm station at the fore of the Bridge is irregular. The Intrepid-class, the Nova-class, and the Defiant-class are all large-scale starships which have Bridges with a single helm station at the fore, but those are highly advanced vessels compared to how the Baker is described.

== Well the NX class did have a single helm station too! :P

• Given that a larger vessel like the Galaxy-class has a single turbolift to its bridge, why does the Baker have multiple?
  

== I’ll negate one

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Armory
The armory is connected directly to the port side of the ship’s security hall on deck 10 within the secondary hull. The armory contains enough Type-2’s for arming the ship’s standard security forces. The armory does not contain housings for Type-3 phaser rifles or any other forms of heavy weapons, armor or grenades, beyond stun variants, for the crew’s use.

I’m sort of curious why this is necessary when you already have a Security Hall. This is a research vessel; the Security Department should be able to equip its staff adequately without requiring additional weapons storage.

== I’ll negate it

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UTILITY SYSTEMS
Cargo Bays
The Baker houses four large cargo bays in the primary hull and two smaller cargo bays in the central sections of the secondary hull. Each large cargo bay holds a single cargo transporter each.

Why don’t you just have a shared cargo transporter? It’s not like the technology is that inaccurate.

==Faster loading time? :P

The large primary cargo bays are situated along the outer edge of the primary hull on decks 4 and 5 two on each side. The smaller secondary bays are located at port and starboard at the central areas of deck 15 in the secondary hull. All of these bays house an exterior docking hatch for access while in dock.

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Transporter Systems
The Baker has one transporter room, which is each capable of transporting six personnel at a time. The transporter room is on the port side of deck 8. Each transporter system has a range of 40,000 km.
Replace “Each” with “The” here. The Baker only has one transporter system.

One emergency 12-person transporter is located on the starboard side of deck 8 with a range of 15,000 km.

== Ok

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Unlike more modern ship classes the Baker does not contain an EMH program nor holo-emitters within the ship’s sickbays.
The basic standard for specs is typically, “If it isn’t mentioned, it isn’t there.” Ergo, this isn’t needed.

== I know but I feel given people ‘assume’ stuff unless it is listed it should be listed I’d prefer leaving it in there because I’ve seen people assume stuff with specs cause its not listed

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• 8x Type-VII Phaser Banks
  So, do you have six phaser banks or eight?
  

== Eight!

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• <strike>Astropsics</strike> Astrophysics Lab
  Just a mild spelling error here.

== Noted

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There are still a few issues with the spec that need to be addressed, but compared to the previous draft, the issues are relatively minor. The review remains open.

Nicholas Villarreal
Engineering Director

== Thanks Nick I’ve made the edits!

Robert Archer