Posted by Vice Admiral Robert Archer (Engineering Director) in Ship Submission Review - RSE Keldrak Class Medium Cruiser (Early TNG Era) - 5-5-2023
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Here is my review for the Keldrak. However, the review still is open until the 5th tomorrow by noon US Eastern time.

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HISTORY AND MISSION OVERVIEW

== No problems here I think

Mission Profiles

== No problems here I think

STRUCTURE AND CONSTRUCTION

== No problems here I think, also nice to see custom design work done like way older designs!

SCIENCE AND REMOTE SENSING SYSTEMS

SENSOR SYSTEMS

== No problems here I think

COMPUTER CORE SYSTEMS

== No problems here I think

WARP PROPULSION SYSTEM

== No problems here I think, I also like the unique use of soft-canon terms from the The Way books of the Romulans from the 80s/90s I think it was?

IMPULSE PROPULSION SYSTEM

== No problems here I think

TACTICAL SYSTEMS

DISRUPTOR SYSTEM

The Keldrak-class is equipped with 10 Type-VIII disruptor arrays. Four are mounted with two facing forward and two aft on the dorsal and ventral wings to port and starboard. Each array consists of 50 emitters each. These arrays, in addition to normal operations, can also fire in two other beam configurations. These firing alterations can be emitted as a focused-beam that produces a smaller targeting point but increases the energy output or split-beam that produces a larger targeting point but with a reduction in overall energy effects.

Two additional, 25 emitter arrays, located forward of the main bridge on the head of the ship to port and starboard, are capable of both beam and bolt fire. These arrays cannot be fired in any special configuration.

The system has a maximum energy output of 3.0 MegaWatts, and a maximum effective range of 150,000km.

== Small consideration for draft 2 to consider changing. Given this special beam function for those that do so you could I think slightly up the energy output and reduce the max range for that if the functions could do such to a measurable degree. Up to you though

PLASMA TORPEDO LAUNCHING SYSTEM

== No problems here I think

SHIELDING SYSTEM

== No problems here I think

CLOAKING SYSTEM

== No problems here I think

COMMAND AND SUPPORT SYSTEMS

BRIDGE

== No problems here I think

Wardroom/Briefing Room

== No problems here I think

Ready Room

== No problems here I think

BRIG/ARMORY/MAIN WEAPONS CONTROL

== No problems here I think

MAIN ENGINEERING

== No problems here I think

SCIENCE FACILITIES

== No problems here I think

UTILITY SYSTEMS

Cargo Bays

== No problems here I think

Transporter Rooms

== No problems here I think

Tractor Beams

== No problems here I think

CREW SUPPORT SYSTEMS

WARDROOM

== No problems here I think

Medical Facility

== No problems here I think

CREW MESS HALLS

== No problems here I think

REPLICATION SYSTEM

== No problems here I think

RECREATIONAL FACILITIES

== No problems here I think

CREW ACCOMMODATIONS

== No problems here I think

AUXILIARY SPACECRAFT SYSTEMS

== No problems here I think, though as an aside later design ideas, would be cool to have the Raptor and/or Y’gora aux specs on hand too

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

== No problems here I think

DECK LAYOUT

== No problems here I think

Deck 3:
* Senior Officer’s mess
* Senior Officers quarters
* Observer quarters (1-5)
* Guest Quarters (1-5)

== Small wording of consistency error here. Up above in the room sections you list this as VIP quarters. I assume the Observer quarters are supposed to be those. Either update all the deck listings with VIP or change the VIP title to this

Deck 4:
* Senior Officers quarters
* Upper Armory/Weapons Control
* Observer quarters (6-10)
* Guest quarters (6-10)
* Emergency Transporter Room 1

== Same problem as here as stated above

== No other problems here for the desk listing I think

SHIPS OF CLASS

== No problems here I think

CONCLUSION

== No problems here I think

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== Overall Katy a great solid first draft. Just some minor slips that I noted. Again this review period is still open until the 5th tomorrow till 12pm US Eastern time.

Robert Archer EDir

The review of the Keldrak cruiser is now closed and returned to the designer with the comments from this review and my AEDir for the next draft.

Robert Archer EDir